This picture; Subway by George Tooker, shows a lot of color and surroundings in his piece of art work. On the left side of the picture I see four men in diffrent color coats; red, yellow, and purple. They all are standing in a line, in the back of the line I see 2 large gate doors that are slightly open. On the bottom left of the picture I see a big metal railing and stairs leading to a basement. There is an old women walking down the stairs in a beige long coat and a red hat. In the middle of the picture I see an young women in a long coat and a red knee length dress, she is wearing black flat shoes and her facial expression looks very frightened of her surroundings. In back of her is a man dressed in all red; a red hat, shoes, pants, and a red suitcase, the man's facial expression looks very mad. Their is another man in back of her with the same expression, but this man is dressed in all beige. On the right side of the picture is a metal gate with stairs leading down, a man is coming down the stairs dressed in beige pants and a red short jacket. Next to the gates are a metal swinging structure and behind this is three women, two wearing red and one wearing purple.
B+
your descriptive paragraph has a very good spatial order and specific details. What is lacking are the sensory images to help the reader "see" what is being described.
This picture; Subway by George Tooker, shows a lot of color and surroundings in his piece of art work. On the left side of the picture I see four men in diffrent color coats; red, yellow, and purple. They all are standing in a line, in the back of the line I see 2 large gate doors that are slightly open. On the bottom left of the picture I see a big metal railing and stairs leading to a basement. There is an old women walking down the stairs in a beige long coat and a red hat. In the middle of the picture I see an young women in a long coat and a red knee length dress, she is wearing black flat shoes and her facial expression looks very frightened of her surroundings. In back of her is a man dressed in all red; a red hat, shoes, pants, and a red suitcase, the man's facial expression looks very mad. Their is another man in back of her with the same expression, but this man is dressed in all beige. On the right side of the picture is a metal gate with stairs leading down, a man is coming down the stairs dressed in beige pants and a red short jacket. Next to the gates are a metal swinging structure and behind this is three women, two wearing red and one wearing purple.
B+
your descriptive paragraph has a very good spatial order and specific details. What is lacking are the sensory images to help the reader "see" what is being described.